Bridie's Domain: Web Serial

I'm writing another story, a web serial called Bridie's Domain. (I was thinking maybe I'd change it to Bridie's Mansion, but we'll see.) It's my first try at writing a mystery, so why don't you go over and give me a couple pointers?

Bridie's Domain


Also: DLWoW is in progress! Why don't you help it start sailing:

Da Lovely World of Writing


And just for fun: